Reblogged from Deadly Ever After
By Julie Hutchings
I’m lucky enough to be reading THE SHADOW OF LIGHT by Summer Wier, a YA novel that I cannot wait to be published. We’re working on doing something you don’t hear much about—ADDING text, as she’s a sparse writer, something that I can identify with after writing THE HARPY and THE ANIMAL, and something I have to loosen up on in writing the sequel to RUNNING HOME, as that series is written with a bit more flourish.
Summer does a great job of still giving little details that tell you so much about the characters without hitting you in the face with backstory and a lot of “she was this” and “she likes that.” Here’s the example that made me need to write this post:
“We brought your favorites—black olive and jalapeno pizza and strawberry cake.” Faye was the only other person I knew who liked jalapenos on pizza.
I winked. “You know me so well.”
This could have so easily been:
“We brought pizza and cake.” Faye loved pizza, and I didn’t care what I ate as long as it was edible.
“God, I’m starving.”
This is a tidbit that is absolutely meaningless in the long run. They got pizza and cake, whatever. But in Summer’s version, we see that our main character likes strong flavors, implying that she has strong opinions and probably isn’t a quiet onlooker about much of anything. I love the cheeky little wink. You also see that Faye is very close to her, that they know each other well without her having to say so.
In the two liner I wrote, it says nothing specific. It implies nothing, except that maybe this character is passive.
Take the interactions and transitions and seemingly unimportant lines in your work and make them actually say something. Remember the books you’ve read where you breeze over the more humdrum action, the cooking of things, the driving to places, the going to class or work or whatever. How could the author have made that part that probably bored them to write into a bit that has significance to the character?
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And don’t miss Julie Hutchings’ debut novel Running Home. It’s amazing!!